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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
#electricity #power #station
A hydroelectric
power
station
 can generate electric
power
 by using the
energy
 of
water
 flowing from
high
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level
 to
low
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a low
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level
. It works different functions
in
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day
 and
night
. In the
day
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daytime
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time
,
water
 in the high-
level
reservoir
go
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 through the intake under the dam which is only open
in
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day
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time
.
Then
 the
water
flow
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 into the
power
station
 in which there is a generator. The generator is operated by
a reversible turbines
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reversible turbines
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 that can transfer the
water flowing
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 force to the mechanical force which is the
power
 of the generator. The generated electricity
then
 goes to the national grid through the
power
 lines.
On the other hand
in
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the
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night
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nighttime
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time
, the
power
station
 works in a reversed way. It pumps
water
 from the
low
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low-level
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level
reservoir
 to
high-
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level
reservoir
 to provide
the
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enough
water
 for
day
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daytime's
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time's
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time
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 work. The
water
 is pumped by the same reversible turbines from
low-
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the low-level
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level
reservoir
. So the
power
station
 actually consumes
energy
 at
night
. But
that is
 in order to generate more
power
 in the
day
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daytime
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time
. In a conclusion, a hydroelectric
power
station
 can generate
power
is
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based on the
differce
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difference
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in heighth
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heighth
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height
of
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water
level
. In
day
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the day
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time
, it uses
the
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natural
water
energy
.
Meanwhile
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in
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at
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the
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night
, it transfers the
water
 to create and store the
energy
 for the
next
day
.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, energy, water, level, day, night, time, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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