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The table belows gives information on consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The table belows gives information on consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table demonstrates how
the
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people spend their money in the countries Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and
Turkey
 on
products
 like foods,drinks,tobacco,clothing,footwear,leisure and education. From the table,
it is clear that
 all of the countries spend most on eating
products
 like food, drinks or tobacco.
While
Turkey
 spends the most in
this
 department with
a
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32.14 %,
while
 Italy
spend
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 the least with 16.36 %. With an expenditure of 9.00 %
in
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 clothing and footwear, Italy comes first ,
while
sweden
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Sweden
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 spends the least
in
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on
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 these
products
of
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 5.40 %. Being the top spender in foot
catogery
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category
,
Turkey
also
spend
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 the most when it comes to leisure or education
while
spain
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Spain
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 spends the least with 1.98 %. The country with the most expenditure in the year 2008 is
turkey
 followed by Ireland, Italy, Spain and Sweden respectively. From the table,
it is clear that
 all the countries spend more
for
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 food
products
while
 they spend far less amount on leisure or education.
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