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Today’s society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today’s lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

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The most effective method of travelling is considered to be by a
car
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. I believe, in comparison to other methods
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 mean of conveyance is the fastest as one can choose to travel as per their schedule.
Also
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, a
car
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 can take us where buses are not routed to.
which
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Which
 takes a long
time
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. Mitran da naa chlda Driving a
car
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 is the best way to travel
somewhere
at or in or to any place
anywhere
 in shorter
time
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.
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, in peak
time
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 most of the buses are delayed getting to their scheduled stops and are supposed to follow their designated route. Whereas,
car
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 provide the luxury of using Google maps to search the less congested area and destination is reached in less
time
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.
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,
car
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 allow us to manipulate our travel plan as per the situation.
Additionally
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, a
car
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 can be driven to places where other
mean
the force of workers available
men
 of transports is unavailable. For an instance, less populated areas are not given the benefits of public transportation and if someone is required to have a journey to these areas it would be a challenging task to do.
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, with the presence of a
car
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this
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 journey would no longer be difficult.
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, having a
car
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 is a better alternate to other modes. In conclusion, it can be stated that riding
by
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in
 a
car
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 is the quickest and best method.
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, the government should encourage the citizens to use public transport and should implement
extra number
Suggestion
an extra number
 of buses to reduce congestion and pollution. In conclusion, it can be stated that riding
by
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in
 a
car
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 is the quickest and best method.
However
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, the government should encourage the citizens to use public transport and should implement
extra number
Suggestion
an extra number
 of buses to reduce congestion and pollution.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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