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NOWADAYS MANY PEOPLE CHOOSE TO BE SELF EMPLOYED , RATHER THAN TO WORK FOR A COMPANY OR ORGANIZATION. WHY MIGHT THIS BE THE CASE ? WHAT COULD BE THE DISADVANTAGES OF BEING SELF EMPLOYED?

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These days, being
self
 employed or having own small business makes the correct decision, according to a plethora of people,
instead
 of working for some company.
This
 essay narrates few points depicting why
this
 is considered.
Also
 write-up mentions few disadvantages of the same.
Self
employment
, gets the freedom in many ways, ever thought of getting a leave for some good reason?
Such
 as holiday for anniversary?
One
 has to request the boss of a company and hope for the approval.
Also
one
 has to commute to a distance to show up to get that penny.
Employment
 makes
one
 submissive of the company. As a
self
 employed
one
 has full control of work and family. Work life balance is possible in
self
employment
. There is no middle man between you and your customers, in an organization, there are few middlemen who take some percentage of real profit, sabotaging your income. Disadvantages of
self
employment
 are manageable by taking support of family and friends.
Such
 as at times there is a chance of no profit, which is called as downturn. There can be less or zero payment from customers, customers can run away without paying. In
such
 case there won’t be steady monthly income as in
employment
.
Employment
 with establishment means better coverage of health insurance, provident fund, support in difficult situations of the human resource team and lawyers of companies, all these factors are almost negligible in the case of
self
employment
, which is detrimental for
such
 category of earning. To overcome
this
 either
one
 should have good contacts, which can take interest in
such
 cases and solve the problem by charging a minimum.
Also there
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Also, there
 are good tax clauses for
self
employment
 from government, which is a boon for forward thinking of being on their own. In conclusion,
one
 has to have good connections to keep
self
employment stable
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employment, stable
 from the chaos of problems against you;
this
 state of having paid work is a boon for people seeking freedom compared to being a workforce at multinational.
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  • empowerment
  • ownership
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