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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

#people #government #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
Fuel is mandatory for any type of transport. Most of all types of transports
are depends
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are depended
depend
 on the fossil fuels which comes from the earth core. These fossil
fuels'
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fuel
fuels
 combustion generates toxic gases which
causes
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cause
 environmental issues. Some people think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems, but it
dosen't seems
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doesn't seem
doesn't seems
 like a permanent solution
for
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to
 the environmental issues. There are a lot arguments to support my statement.
Firstly
 environmental problems are caused different causes, combustion of fossil
fules
a substance that can be consumed to produce energy
fuels
are
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is
 one of those reasons. We should concentrate on each and every aspect to
controll
power to direct or determine
control
 the environmental
cahanges
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
changes
. We must stop
deforestration
the state of being clear of trees
deforestation
, dumping chemicals into rivers, excessive use of water
resourses
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 etc..., all these acts
causes
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cause
 environmental changes like global
warmig
the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature
warming
. As some people's point of we must stop using fossil fuels, at least try to use less, but
increasing cost
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the increasing cost
 of fuel is not a solution. Our whole
economical
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economic
 system depends on
fules
record in a public office or in a court of law
files
 now a days, so increasing prices of the fuels will
causes
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cause
 more chaos in the society.
Instead
 we should create
awerness
having knowledge of
awareness
 on fossil fuels in the society to reduce the usage of the fuels. Industries, governments must concentrate on other alternatives of fossil fuels. Implementing the alternatives to fossil fuels will make
change
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changes
 gradually.
This
 only alternative to protect our environment from the climate change. To conclude, we should look into the safe alternatives to fossil fuels
instead
 increasing prices on the fuels.
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