You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn’t able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

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Dear Ali, I hope

this

letter finds you in good health as I am writing to you to tell you more about our previous game

last

Thursday.

First

, as you know we played against the red team and they were very strong and well trained.We missed you because you are our twelve players.

Furthermore

, we won the game with a score of 3 to 2 and that was our surprise for you and we all wished you were with us.

Second

, the weather was warm and all the arrangements went well, except for the parking.It was crowded because we did not expect

the

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huge

number of

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audience, but everything was under control.

Moreover

, the red team players were aggressive at the beginning,

then

they started being more friendly.

Third

, I was

happy

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playing

this

match,

however

, I did not feel

this

at the start because you were not with us.

Also

, all of us were doing our best to win so you can be happy and excited.

Finally

, I wish you will get well soon and we are waiting for you to play the

match. Yours sincerely, Lama Jaljouli

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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8 paragraphs

187 words

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