In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this issue?

In some countries, child labour become the alarming issue
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.
Being a citizens all have their different opinions regarding
this
issue. From my perspective, I am totally, against the child labour and considered it as a
curse
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Curse
.
First
of all, as
this
is a very well known saying, "Children are the backbone of the nation".
Furthermore
, I can elaborate my view
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,
by sharing the data regarding some countries.
For instance
,
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,
developed countries like America
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,
where
main focus
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the main focus
is given
on
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to
the teenagers studies, so that they become successful in their life. Most of the school in America
are
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is
govt
something acquired without compensation
gift
aided so those persons who are not financially strong can
also
admit their child in the school
,
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,
their studies are not hampered due to the shortage of money.
Secondly
, If the teenager, is well
educated he
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educated, he
will
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
become a good and responsible citizen.. But,
this
is the duty of
govt
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
got
gift
to take stern actions in the field of education. To make my point more clear, I shared some facts like in India,
majority
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the majority
of schools are private aided
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,
and MCD schools are less in number as compared to them. So, people who are living under
poverty line
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the poverty line
are not able to admit their juvenile in schools
as a result
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,
they
are engaged
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engage
in paid work.
Last
but not the least, "Only one thing should be in the hands of the children and
that is
pencil ". TO conclude, I am enclosing my views, with suggesting measures that
govt
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
got
.
schools
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Schools
should be opened on a large scale and
moreover
, being a responsible citizen we should raise voice against
this
evil act.

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