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Band 4.5

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999

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The given line graph illustrates the
amount
Change the quantifier
number

It appears that the quantifier the amount does not fit with the countable noun vehicles. Consider changing the quantifier or the noun.

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 of stolen vehicles in four countries, namely Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada over a decade. It can be noticed that the rate of robbery in Great Britain took the lead for the whole period,
whereas
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 France and Canada showed
opposing
Correct article usage
an opposing

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 trend for Sweden. In 1990, The greatest amount of
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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theft was in Great Britain.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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