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Govt. should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#govt #money #railways #roads
The governing body that makes huge plans and sets of
structure invest
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structure, invest
 the large
amount
 for the benefit of each
individual in healthcare
Suggestion
individual healthcare
, transportation, communication and much more. Nowadays, with the rapid growth of population the complications are growing
abruptly especially
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abruptly, especially
 when it comes
to commute
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to commuting
 on daily routine. I completely agree with the notion of spending more on
this
.
Firstly
, some partial
amount
 must infuse on
railway system
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the railway system
railway systems
 to regulate it in a proper way that suits the environment which is
eco
Suggestion
Eco
 friendly. Pollution results asthma, skin cancer and many other diseases.
This
also
 effect the
green house
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
 gas emission. Each country wants to be a part of “MONTREAL PROTOCOL” policy. Whose aim is to reduce the carbon gas emission as possible and
this
 is
only possible solution
Suggestion
the only possible solution
 to set a
rail road
compel by coercion, threats, or crude means
railroad
 infrastructure so that every citizen wish travel via train.
Secondly
, the commuting via railway as compared to road is
cost
Suggestion
costing
 economical and pocket friendly for a person as compared to the fuel cost.
Government
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The government
 should start new railway infrastructure with rail stations like European countries within a city.
This
 would allow each passenger to save from
rush
Suggestion
the rush
 and reach the destiny on time.
Finally
,
favoring
promote over another
favouring
 only to invest in Railways system will make the situation worse and
this
 may not help out in
country’s economy
Suggestion
the country’s economy
a country’s economy
. E.g. Disable, cyclist commute to their destination using their own personal vehicle they can’t use the broken road.
Furthermore
, the logistics services use heavy truck vehicles to provide supply in will be affected. Pakistan’s communication roads are well exemplary which require a huge
amount
 of investment. The roads showcase the beauty only when the Cricket players from foreign state arrive. Overall, on serious note the Govt.
invest
Suggestion
Invest
 the equal
amount
 of
share
Suggestion
shares
the share
 on the both communication systems.

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