Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it.

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Shopping on the Internet has been a part of our life.
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,
this
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prevalent but excessive behaviour has led to a series of environmental problems and the issue of unemployment. In the following, I am going to elaborate the effects of online shopping with respect to the two aspects mentioned above.
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of all, one of the negative environmental effects is deforestation. In order to deliver the purchases safely
to
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in
the
customers'hands
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customers' hands
, layers of layers of wrappings and boxes of boxes are applied. The customers may spend at least five minutes to unwrap the packaging. The raw material of
packaging
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the packaging
is paper and paper is made of trees.
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is a vivid example to show that one of the reasons why the disappearing rate of the Amazon has been increasing is due to the escalating the popularity of online shopping. It raises the demand of paper which induce the exaggerating the size of deforestation. Without trees, the greenhouse gases are unleashed to the Earth.
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, the greenhouse effect would become
prominant
having a quality that thrusts itself into attention
prominent
and eventually, exacerbating the global warming.
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, the other consequence of online shopping is the chance of the unemployed to have psychological illness would be greater. Those employees who have been
sacked
draw into the mouth by creating a practical vacuum in the mouth
sucked
away from their position are generally with low academic achievement and less competitive because the system used requires a lot of high technical employees who possess computing and technological profession to operate.
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, they encounter low self-esteem by emerging a concept of the disconnection of people and being abandoned by the society. In the long run, the negative mindset could develop into
emtion
any strong feeling
emotion
disorder. To conclude, based on the influence of online shopping showed above, e-shopping could result in adverse environmental issue and serious personal health matter.

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