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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Computers, like any other human inventions had both advantages & disadvantages that can be caused to the mankind.
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 they are introduced in classrooms both pros & cons will be there, which I am going to describe below. Coming to the plus points, they can bring a wide range of access via modern technology to the footstep of one.Especially in the remote locations where access to classrooms itself is a challenge, these devices can bring commendable changes in terms of content of education, easy way of learning, range of material available.Because of increase & availability of high internet speeds, online testing materials, mentors it will be cakewalks to adhere the latest available things to all sections as the students. Coming to the minus points, any machine could not replace the value, interaction what a man can do.When teacher directly contacts their pupil, the kind of command, affection, care which can be given is not at all possible with a box.
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, the level of knowledge displayed by directly contacting person might be slightly less than technological tool.
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 online contents & courses can be done using computers
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the prestigious universities/schools/colleges in the entire world might be replaced with personal desktops & laptops.What we get in web can never replace human direct impact & relation.When a person is present in class & teaching something it is not only subject he/she is saying, but
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 they are adding value to the education either you say it as discipline, common sense, values..Name it anything which will not be in the books & syllabus. The conclusion of my opinion is that even though we had both positive, negative impacts of computers in classrooms, while respecting benefits given by advanced inventions, I sincerely believe that some things like persons in classrooms are irreplaceable.
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