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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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People
 always favoured several specific skills over others. They thought that the skills like writing, reading and solving mathematical problems are the core part of education. Because of the technological advancement, many people are now including
computer
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 skill in that list. I think they are right.
what
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What
 is the main purpose of education? The purpose is to make us able to deal with our everyday
ploblems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
 and find an optimum solution to every
obstacles
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obstacle
. In the past, people needed to learn how to read and write so that they may figure out the solution from a written script and write down the new ideas. If we look over our present world which is more complex than before has more complicated problems. Which resulted the mass involvement of
computer
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 technologies in our everyday life as it gives us an upper hand over many problems. Since
computer
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become
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becomes
 more important in todays society, the abilities to use and
controll
power to direct or determine
control
controlled
controls
 has
achived
to gain with effort
achieved
 huge values. In many sectors, we need some workers who have very good
computer
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 knowledge. That means, if someone has a good command over it, he has more opportunity to get a good job. With the huge advancement of internet technologies, present world become more globalize than ever before. Nowadays, every industry has a big
dependance
the state of relying on or being controlled by someone or something else
dependence
 on it.
Every thing
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Everything
 is
in online now
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online now
. Billions of people are now connected with each other. To extract advantage
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of
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 opportunity, every
sectors
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sector
are valuing
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is valued
is valuing
 those persons who are very handy with recent technology.
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, very good with handling
computer
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 technology. To sum up,
this
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 skill has a massive potential in present job sectors. Like other
abilities including
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abilities, including
 math, reading and writing,
computer
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 skill is
some thing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 you must learn today to cope up with not only our present but
also
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 our future.

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