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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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In recent decades, parents are getting more aware about their offsprings. They spend a huge amount of money to buy a
toys
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toy
 for them. In
this
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 essay, I shall examine the advantages as well as disadvantages of having a large
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 of toys.
To begin
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 with, some parents buy toys to make their offspring happy and
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 they believed that having toy in their
life
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 are more joy able and
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 a great for source of
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 pass. Having toys is
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 more beneficial for their mind development.
In addition
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 to
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, it is
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 seen the behaviour of the offsprings who used to spend more
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 with toys are very calm and a very reticent kind of. Their mindset is
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 developing
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 because of that the literacy skills are increasing rapidly due to which they perform
excellent
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excellently
 in the academic curriculum. On the other side, it is
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 assumed that having a large
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 of toys and spending more
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 with them is
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 badly effect for offspring health due to which they got depressed and many other diseases. A children's care organisation has recently done their studies on children having large
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 of toys and t they have found that having a large
number
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 of toys and spending more
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 with them is the main reason of depression and
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 they are unaware about social
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. The researcher
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 mentioned the lack physical fitness in offspring having large
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 of
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time
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times
. In the conclusion, I would like to mention that toys in child
life
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 are good because they do not make them feel alone, but the parents should
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 spend more
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to play
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playing
 with their children and make them aware about physical fitness and social
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 which are the basic need of human
life
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.

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