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Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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Life
 is a journey with lots of experiences and events. All the experiences may not be good at the time, but later
on
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on, one
one
 could understand the sweetness of success the lessons the bitter experiences give.
First
 of all, there will not be anyone who hasn't experienced the sourness of
life
 events. It is through the trial and error method
one
 knows the lessons of
life
.
For example
, a toddler who starts walking manages to walk only after several falls and injuries. It is these injuries that help the child to walk properly.
Similarly children
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Similarly, children
 who are curious about all things may try to catch the igniting fire of a lamp, and they realize it as a dangerous thing only after their fingers get burned, which give them the lesson not to play with fire.
Similarly those
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Similarly, those
 who are masters of driving may have surely experienced the taste of falls and broken limbs.
Thus only
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Thus, only
 by a failure
one
 reaches the peak of success.
One
 can easily handle the
life
 situations, if
one
 experiences it earlier,
otherwise
 there will be certain difficulties. Great scientists, philosophers all reached their heights by overcoming the bad experiences. Abraham Lincoln,
for instance
, belonged to a very poor family and he became the president of America after several hardships. But he ruled the country and led a humble
life
 as he assimilated the lessons from the
life
. History provides many more examples like these including, Mahatma Gandhi, and Mother Teresa. To conclude,
life
 is full of good and bad experiences and even though they seemed to be difficult at the time, they are valuable teachers, who teach us the correct and wrong paths of
life
, which we realize at the end when these experiences help to excel in our
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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