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Obesity is an increasing public health problem in some parts of the world. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

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There are several reasons why obesity has become
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 a widespread issue
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 ways we can solve
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 problem. Many of people eat a lot of junk food, which includes, burgers
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chips, cold drinks, pizza etc.
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 the one reason obesity has become a serious issue.People are not taking care of their diet
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they ear unhealthy food that causes them fatness. The Other main reason of
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 most of the people, especially kids are too lazy, many of them are busy playing video games on a computer or doing any particular work that does not allow them to participate in a physical activity. Parents should watch and advise their children to do daily exercise.

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