A few people debate that technological inventions like cell phones are making people socially less interactive. To what extend do you agree with this statement

With
avdancement
Suggestion
the advancement
advancement
of telecommunication and internet, the World
has became
Suggestion
has become
a small village where people get in touch
easly
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
.
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.
However
, the use of thèse tools of communication makes people
leasy
moving slowly and gently
lazy
and changes a lot of habits. I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that technology have badly affected thé way that people react to each other. Thé
childhoud
the time of person's life when they are a child
childhood
childhoods
is greatly concerned. In thé récent past
,
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,
children used to play games like
:
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:
football, basketball, etc..., and interact with
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
. Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
they spend a lot of time facing their computers or
gamebox
Suggestion
Gamebox
game box
wich
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
Can lead a lot of
deasies
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
like
ottism
(psychiatry) an abnormal absorption with the self; marked by communication disorders and short attention span and inability to treat others as people
autism
.
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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