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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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To stay
heatlhy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
 becoming more difficult in
this
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 era, people have many
issue
Suggestion
issues
 to maintain
there
of them or themselves
their
heatlhy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
 diet in daily routine. The main
casue
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
cause
case
course
 of
this
Linking Words
 problem
is
Suggestion
Is
 busy schedule and fast
food
Use synonyms
,
Accept space
,
 while it can be dominated by giving proper time to diet. To embark with
,
Accept space
,
human being
Suggestion
the human being
have
Suggestion
has
 busy schedule in daily routine and they are not getting time for their
heatlhy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
 diet. To be more
preicse
sharply exact or accurate or delimited
precise
prince
, in the era people are doing two jobs and they have no time to cook
thier
of them or themselves
their
food
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 at home, so they
perfer
like better; value more highly
prefer
 to eat
food
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 from outside like burger, pizza. Along with it, for the taste of mouth
,
Accept space
,
 folks love to eat
oustide
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
food
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 rather
Linking Words
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
healhty
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
food
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. The survey was conducted by heath
food
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 department showed that
,
Accept space
,
 30% people prefer to eat
food
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 from the outside rather
Linking Words
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 to cook at home. These
problem
Suggestion
problems
can be solve
Suggestion
can be solved
 if, human
follow
Suggestion
follows
 the proper schedule in their daily life, they should have to make
timetable
Suggestion
a timetable
 for
thier
of them or themselves
their
food
Use synonyms
.
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