Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people hold the opinion that older generations should take care of themselves in their old age, whereas other people have conflicting views and they think that it is the responsibility of a

regime

to provide the financial

support

required if a person is retired. While, in my viewpoint, it is very difficult to identify who should provide

support

and help older people in their difficult time. On the one hand, many people think there are multifarious reasons why the government is not the only one who should be responsible for supporting the older generations.

Firstly

, they think, that if a working person save enough money, which can be utilized during their egregious times or during the retirement than, they do not have to be dependent on anyone.

This

would be an ideal situation, and obviously, these old people can live comfortably, even if the government does not provide them the financial

support

Moreover

, if younger generations take care of their parents during their retirement, than older citizens do not need any

support

from anyone.

Furthermore

, the

regime

of incipient countries struggle with funds as they need to take care of other indispensable infrastructures

such

as better health facilities, proper roads for travel,

in addition

, proper schooling.

On the contrary

, other people argue with these facts. As per their understanding, the

regime

should keep some budget from the overall welfare budget to help and

support

the elderly people, undeniably, every citizen of a nation during their young age had helped in establishing society for the better living by paying the sufficient tax.

Furthermore

, nowadays, due to the high-level competition, there are not ample of jobs available in the market and especially younger people are the

first

choice of these jobs, because of the better qualifications and superior skill sets.

Consequently

, the situation becomes worse for the senior citizens, as it becomes strenuous for them to survive without money and

therefore

, left with no option except taking the help from the government. To recapitulate, looking at the above facts, it is hard to justify that whether only the

regime

should be accountable to help the senior people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

356 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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