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The government should invest more money in teaching science than in other subjects for a country’s development and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are different views about whether governments should only focus on the teaching of science subjects to help their countries develop. While I accept that concentrating on these subjects brings about benefits, I would argue that it is better not to neglect other subjects. For a variety of reasons, I agree that the focus on teaching science-related subjects helps a
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, many of the scientific breakthroughs rely heavily on in-depth knowledge of mathematics, physics and chemistry.
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, in the field of medicine, scientists need a great knowledge of chemistry to do research and invent new drugs. The teaching quality of these subjects should
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 be continuously improved.
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, when students study science subjects, they need to find solutions to a wide range of different problems, which can encourage their creativity and imagination.
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 capabilities play an Important role in coming up with technological innovations, [and these advances help a
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 gain a competitive edge over other nations. Despite the above arguments, it seems to me that students should
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 pay attention to other subjects. In the era of globalisation, international trade significantly contributes to the development of a
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. It is nearly impossible to engage in trading activities with other countries if language barriers exist.
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 means that the government needs to invest in the teaching of foreign languages, in Singapore,
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, most people can speak English fluently because the school curriculum focuses largely on
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 subject. Since Singaporean people are able to work with people from abroad, the
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 attracts many investments from other parts of the world. In conclusion, while I agree that government spending on teaching science subjects helps a
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 progress, I believe that teaching subjects
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 as foreign languages is
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 necessary.
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