Government around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health. Do you agree or disagree?

Growing up with the invention of advance
technologies including
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technologies, including
space
research consume huge amount of
money
by the help nation's economy.
Instead
of focusing on those studies, government should be conscious and invest regarding the
health
need of the citizens. It seems that,
health
is out and out important thing than any other in order to contribute their country. What if the
disease
spread
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spreads
world-wide by the lack of proper research on
disease
?
Basic need
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The basic need
is mandatory for every individual. In many
countries particularly
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countries, particularly
developing and underdeveloped
countries people
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countries, people
face numerous obstacles by the lack of primary needs; education,
health
and so on. If the government lunch
health
education programs, medical survey,
disease
control and prevention, including free
health
camp rather than wasting
money
on
space
experiments
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experiments, then
then
it would be far better in order to meet
goal
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the goal
goals
and objectives of providing those needs. One's can only able to contribute their nation only if he or she achieve their basic
health
need.
Furthermore
, through spending
money
on epidemiological investigation and epidemiological research laboratory plays significant role in terms of preventing
disease
epidemics and pandemic. Once the
disease
spread globally
then
it leads to destroy whole nations. If we already implement those mentioned things through concerning with relevant authorized governmental agencies
then
we can able to save thousand of live by determining specific equipments which needs immediately after
disease
occurrence.
In addition
, for doing
space
program needs huge amount which poor countries
can not
can not
cannot
afford. It seems too luxuriant and needed highly skilled person. But there
is
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are
only
fewer
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few
countries which can able to produce a person with
required ability
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the required ability
to do
space
experiments.
Moreover
, some countries are too insufficient to lunch college, university related to
space
program due to poor economic situation.
However
, investing
money
on
space
related programs would help our
next
generation through inventing new technologies. But for now, the most needed and precious
thing
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things
is our
health
. To sum up,
although
spending
money
on
space
programs probably assists our coming generations in
future but
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future, but
basic needs, controlling
disease
occurrence and maintaining economic crisis of a country are the most important factors to lead
whole country
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the whole country
to become developed and independent.

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