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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
It is believed by some people that raising the
price
 of petrol can solve the ever increasing
traffic
 problem and
pollution
. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 belief because it will primarily affect people of low socioeconomic status and there are several other ways to
control
 the
pollution
 problem. The rise in
price
Suggestion
the price
 of
fuel
 to
control
traffic
 and
pollution
 is not a good idea as it will primarily affect poor people who already are hand to mouth when it comes to finances. The rich people who already are consuming huge amounts of
fuel
 and contributing to the air
pollution
 will have no effects on their lives, whereas, poor people have to cut down expenditure from grocery or other domestic bills. Their difficult lives will become even tougher with
this
price
 hike and will have very little effect on
pollution
 as they contribute to a very small proportion of
traffic
.
Hence
price
 hike is not a good option to solve
traffic
 problems or atmospheric
pollution
. There are several measures which government can take to
control
 the
traffic
 and
pollution
.
Firstly
, the public transport like metro buses and railway tracks should be improved so that people will start travelling in them rather than individual cars which will drastically reduce the consumption of gasoline and eventually less
traffic
.
Secondly
, the tax on hybrid cars should be reduced as they consume less oil and
hence
 environmentally friendly. If the prices of these cars are low, people will start purchasing them.
Hence
, it will be beneficial for both the rulers and individuals in terms of
fuel
 economy.
Thirdly
, few old worn out cars are responsible for the majority of the carbon dioxide emissions and maximum
fuel
 consumption. Removal of these cars from
traffic
 and replacing them with
fuel
 efficient hybrid cars will successfully
control
 the
pollution
 and it is not possible without governments’ active participation. In conclusion,
price hike
Suggestion
the price hike
 of petrol is not a good option to
control
traffic
 problems rather the improvement of local transport and introduction of
fuel
 efficient hybrid cars are better options.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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