Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

It is well said that we are already in
modern era
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the modern era
, where we can easily search for things that we need for daily activities.
Moreover
, many people argue that nowadays human kinds are having more tendency to have many options. I strongly believe that I have
same view
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the same view
about the statement that say we have too many options. To start with, people don't know what is the most vital things that they need.
Therefore
, humans
often makes
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often make
have often made
are often making
too many options to choose.
For example
; I have a friend of mine his name is Ballot, currently he is studying
in
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with
Ignatius Global School as eleven grader. He often made too many choices
such
as; what kind of shoes that he need to buy or even his ideal type of woman are always changing every day and
then
he realized he need to manage his choices carefully and properly. The
next
, humans are always demanding more items.
In addition
, it is not because they can afford to buy it or
not but
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not, but
they have higher
self-esteem
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self-esteem, therefore
therefore
, they always find many measures in order to make choices and accomplish it.
Furthermore
, there was a research conducted by a group of sociology students from
University
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the University
of Oklahoma involving adult men and women. From the research we
can found
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can find
that almost 100% of women are
had
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having
more tendency to make many choices they even don't know cannot accomplish it or not while, men are neutral. All in all, we need to
concerned it
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concerned, it
again before making too many choices.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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