Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

It is well said that we are already in

modern era

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the modern era

, where we can easily search for things that we need for daily activities.

Moreover

, many people argue that nowadays human kinds are having more tendency to have many options. I strongly believe that I have

same view

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the same view

about the statement that say we have too many options. To start with, people don't know what is the most vital things that they need.

Therefore

, humans

often makes

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often make

have often made

are often making

too many options to choose.

For example

; I have a friend of mine his name is Ballot, currently he is studying

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with

Ignatius Global School as eleven grader. He often made too many choices

such

as; what kind of shoes that he need to buy or even his ideal type of woman are always changing every day and

then

he realized he need to manage his choices carefully and properly. The

, humans are always demanding more items.

In addition

, it is not because they can afford to buy it or

not but

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not, but

they have higher

self-esteem

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self-esteem, therefore

therefore

, they always find many measures in order to make choices and accomplish it.

Furthermore

, there was a research conducted by a group of sociology students from

University

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the University

of Oklahoma involving adult men and women. From the research we

can found

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can find

that almost 100% of women are

had

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having

more tendency to make many choices they even don't know cannot accomplish it or not while, men are neutral. All in all, we need to

concerned it

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concerned, it

again before making too many choices.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

overwhelmed
decision fatigue
paralysis by analysis
consumerism
globalization
personal autonomy
market saturation
option overload
decision-making process
psychological well-being
buyer's remorse
customization
trade-offs
minimalism
information superhighway

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