Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstance of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

The fast changing world nowadays, places a premium on how to treat with criminals and punish them in authority of
bring
Suggestion
bringing
them back into society as a useful citizen. Some people believe that each kind of
crime
calls for certain
punishment
. Whereas, the others including me think that the law should be more flexible and all conditions and incentives of crimes had better take into consideration. Most pioneer countries in order to control
crime
in their societies today, are seeking
for
Suggestion
to
strictly enforce legislation which help to control and mitigate the rate of
crime
, above all among juveniles. They argue that once somebody commits a
crime
, there shall be series of vigorous
punishment
rules that enable to throw the book at
culprits
Suggestion
the culprits
,
hence
, the others who are potentially on the verge of commit similar crimes refrain and prefer to come back to the right way.
For example
, if you treat severely with those who steal
breads
Suggestion
bread
, they never think about
steal
Suggestion
stealing
stolen
anything else probably for good.
Moreover
, the society without any
crime perhaps stem
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crime, perhaps stems
crime perhaps stems
partly from these kinds of radical punishments. The prominent thinkers in the 21th century on the one hand, could easily find fault with fixed
punishment
. Conditions and incentives are two important elements when a
crime
is committed. It is not fair to dedicate one
punishment
for all those different conditions. Imagine that a child who is running at school and all of a sudden hit ones and he/she dies because of that. It is not fair to set penalty or long term prison for
this
kind of crimes.
In addition
the way of
punishment
should be able to be
educational
Suggestion
educated
and learn to criminals how control their emotions and come back to their society as a useful adult.
For instance
, the
punishment
for who
are committing
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is committing
a
crime
over and over again should be totally different from under 18 who do that accidentally or for the
first
time. To conclusion, I strongly believe that the legislation should be more flexible especially when it comes to juveniles or accidentally crimes, the severe
punishment
could lead to more serious mental and social problems indeed

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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