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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Sara, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well.I will be coming to London
next
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 month to do my Masters degree in economics and I need your support in finding me a part-time job.
First
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, I got a partial scholarship from my university here in Kuwait to study in London.I will be living in London for 2 years because I have to finish 45 credit hours to receive my degree.
Furthermore
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, I will not be able to visit Kuwait during the holidays unless I got
a
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well paid
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 work.
Second
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, I have to get
a work
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work
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 immediately in order to cover all my expenses and
also
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 to improve my practical skills.
Moreover
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, I am planning to do internal tourism in the United
Kingdoms
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 during my vacations.
Third
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, my plan is to get
a part-time work
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part-time work
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 in a bank, so I can have the best experience
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along
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 my college.
In addition
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, I can do any other related job
for instance
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, in an accountant company, in a school or in a restaurant.I will appreciate it if you can help me in finding a job before I arrive
next
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 month.If you can collect
me
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all
related
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 advertisements from the local newspaper, it would be great.
Finally
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, I will be waiting for your response and I am looking forward to
see
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 you soon. Yours sincerely, Lama Jaljouli
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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