As housing is a basic need for people, governments should provide free housing for everyone who can’t afford it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is
the
fact that food, Correct article usage
a
Use synonyms
house
and clothes are basic necessities Wrong verb form
housing
of
Change preposition
for
human
to live in today’s world. As everyone cannot afford Fix the agreement mistake
humans
buying
a Change the verb form
to buy
house
, some Use synonyms
people
believe Use synonyms
to provide
Change preposition
in providing
Use synonyms
house
Fix the agreement mistake
houses
to
Change preposition
for
such
misfortune Linking Words
people
by Use synonyms
government
. Correct article usage
the government
However
, I believe that Linking Words
such
schemes would result in inflation in Linking Words
economy
unless a proper location system is prepared.
If everyone owns a Add an article
the economy
house
, Use synonyms
people
have more money to spend on other things. They will buy new clothes, Use synonyms
arrange
international trips, Correct word choice
and arrange
for instance
, Linking Words
increase
in more disposable income. Fix the infinitive
to increase
Although
Linking Words
people
will invest money, spending on luxurious items will increase a lot. In fact, Use synonyms
people
will change the product more often than their usual life. Evidently, Use synonyms
such
higher Linking Words
spendings
would lead to inflation in the economy.
Fix the agreement mistake
spending
However
, the prices of housing will affect a lot. Linking Words
People
invest funds in building houses and renting to others. The strategy to provide free housing will affect a lot of Use synonyms
such
investors as prices of homes will reach Linking Words
at
Remove the preposition
apply
its
lowest rate. As anybody Correct pronoun usage
their
is having
a dwelling, no one will Wrong verb form
has
spent
on building a new Change the verb form
spend
be spent
unless
a luxurious home is required. Correct pronoun usage
one unless
For instance
, a recent scheme by the government of Linking Words
the
India for providing homes at a subsidised rate results in sharply falling prices of residence. Correct article usage
apply
People
will refrain Use synonyms
themselves
from investing their Correct pronoun usage
apply
hard earned
wages in Add a hyphen
hard-earned
housing
sector Correct article usage
the housing
due to
Linking Words
such
steps by Linking Words
government
.
Add an article
the government
To sum up
, the idea Linking Words
to provide
free housing for everybody who cannot afford is impacting enormously on the economy and its constitution. It should not be done unless the income disparity Change preposition
of providing
is prevailing
in the market.Wrong verb form
prevails
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task achievement
Try to develop your points more fully to clearly support the main argument. For example, explaining exactly how inflation could occur would strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to paragraph linking and smoother transitions. Enhancing these aspects can improve the logical flow and readability of your essay.
introduction conclusion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, giving the reader a clear understanding of your stance.
supported main points
You raise valid points regarding the economic implications of providing free housing, which shows a thoughtful engagement with the topic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite