Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the company encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Some people believe that males take over all the high level positions while in developed nations, more than a half of
labour force
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the labour force
are women. It is suggested that both genders should be assigned to occupy these jobs by the companies. In my view, allocating
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job
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jobs
and duties does not base on gender and companies cannot be sure that female applicants are appropriate for the high-level vacancies or not.
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with, to assign the
job
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to an individual, it relies on the basis of qualification, skills and experience. If it were a must to fill in the high positions by a certain number of females without considering the aforementioned elements, companies could not ensure the productive outcomes that employees generate.
For example
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, a woman is
designated
done or made or performed with purpose and intent
designed
to take the
job
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as a director, but she performs to be an inexperienced leader whose skills
are
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is
poor, her credibility
in
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with
her colleagues has reduced significantly.
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, there is no point in trying to level off the number of me and women working in senior positions if they are not suitable for the
job
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requirements. Not all women are able to adapt to increasingly high demands and pressure when it comes to leading a big corporation. They have other business to take care
of
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of, such
such
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as family affairs and bringing up children. More importantly,
majority
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the majority
a majority
of
male
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males
the male
are mentally endurable through stress better compared to the opposite sex. Yet, it is a need for a company to put the candidates to a test when allocating the tasks. In conclusion, the problem is to opt for the individual that well fits the
job
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, not depending on their
genders
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gender
.
This
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is not about gender
discrimination but
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discrimination, but
the survival and the sake of
entire company
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the entire company
an entire company
entire companies
.

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