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Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#traffic #cities #companies #factories #employees #countryside
Rapid industrialisation in the
city
 makes the people uncomfortable. 
c
ity
Suggestion
The city
City
is becoming shortens because of rapid industrialization and globalisation. Some people believe that moving to the countryside will help employees and
also
 companies
This
 essay will discuss why displacing to a small town is very much essential these days. Some people believe that moving to the countryside will help both the employees and companies.  
First
, and foremost the increasing number of population in the
c
ity making
Accept comma addition
city, making
it inconvenient to each other. It is better to move to small towns which have less population, which will be an easy job, especially if the job location is nearer to our living place
t
hen
conjunction used in comparatives
than
it is far easier for us.
For instance
, nowadays in the cities, people travel a small amount of distance for large hours. If they situate the living place of the workmen nearby or
besides
 the workplace, it helps him to
work
 longer and healthier as there is immense traffic in the
city
 the one cannot travel even the distance is less. 
In addition
, if they shift the employees to the countryside, they can
work
 peacefully. Employees can make their
work
 time more flexible. Many people in the
city
 are living in Apartments in multi storied buildings rather than Independent houses because of the lack of sites.   The company should Shift to no-traffic zone areas and which there can provide to their employees a traffic free zone for their economies
work
.
Therefore
, the efficiency of their
work
 improves a lot. As freight is one of the major aspect of disturbance to the worker or employee,
for example
 out of a research 75% of workers are having a long downturn because of these present circumstances If the residential issues and traffic minimises 
then
 the worker can more concentrate on the
work
. In conclusion, I believe that the workers and the company could shift to the calm and pleasant town side area.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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