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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and many are endangered. What are the causes of it and what measures can be taken to solve it?

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In the current scenario, the advancement of the modern world is the reason behind deforestation, which in turn led to the annihilation of wild animals.
Hence
, I would like to point out the cause and certain measures to be taken in detail in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are several reasons which tell us how the advancement of the world played A vital role in endangerment of species.
For example
, in order to create new building had lead to cutting of trees.
Thus
, lead to the lose of their nest, which in turn result in destruction of wild animals.
In addition
 to
this
, removal of trees and extinction may result in global warming.
Moreover
, hunting of animals
such
 as squirrels
,
Accept space
,
boar, Sparrow's,
piqeon
Suggestion
Piqeon
etc
the thing named or in question
it
its
 just for the sake of pleasure has been a another sort of logic behind the obsolescence of animals.
similarly
Suggestion
Similarly
, there are many other reasons behind species elimination
such
 as chemical that are discharged from the factory when mixed with water had led to the deaths of many animals.
Likewise
, smoke released from factories result in the death of airborne species.
Accordingly
, these are some of the reasons behind animal elimination, there may be more.
Secondly
, These problems can be solved by taking Certain measures
such
 as the Government should prohibit hunting, cutting of trees, fixing a location for building industries, providing awareness to the public about animal extinction.
For instance
, compulsory awareness class for school children, awareness boards etc.
Therefore
, These are some of the steps taken in order to stop endangerment of animals.
This
 shows that, animal extinction can be controlled by taking certain measures
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