some people think that to be successful you need to get University education whereas others say it is not true. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The table above
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take the place of or be parallel or equivalent to
represents
proportion
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the proportion
of different categories of families living in
poverty
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in Australia in 1999. They
given
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are given
have given
gave
different family types and their proportion of the people living in the
poverty
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. There are different categories like single aged
,
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,
couple
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aged, single with no children and
couple
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with no children etc.., above all solo parents are tops in percentage with 21% of them are living in property, but numbers there are 232,000 people living
poverty
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by 1990. When it comes to couples with children they are high in numbers living in
property
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a property
the property
with 933,000, but in percentage they bit less with 12%. It clearly shows the
couple
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with children are high in numbers and within
poverty
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are very less. It is just because of the care couples take for their children and for their family. It
make
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makes
family secure and
finacially
from a financial point of view
financially
strong.
Intrestingly we
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Interestingly, we
Interestingly we
can see
percentage
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the percentage
and number of
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couple
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couples
with no children are very less in
poverty
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with 12% following 211,000 in numbers.
This
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shows a clear view that
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couple
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couples
the couple
without family are financially strong because of less expenditures.
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Finally we
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Finally, we
can aged
couple
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are the richest community in 1990 in Australia. There are only 4% of couples in
poverty
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, when it comes to the numbers they are only 48,000 which shows aged life is very secure and strong in Australia in 1990. I believe that
Australian government
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the Australian government
and society are the reasons for strong support
to
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for
aged
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the aged couple
couple
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in Australia.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university education
  • higher pay
  • sweated and sacrificed
  • higher education
  • time, effort, and financial investment
  • specialized knowledge and skills
  • job prospects
  • economic contributions
  • valuable contributions
  • fairness and equality
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