The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007.
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barchart
provides information about the changes in the highest number of Asian elephants in 1997 and 2004 between 1994-2007.
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Overall
Asian Linking Words
elephant
in 1999 and 2004 shows some fluctuations.
Vietnam elephants show about 1200 in 1997 but later reduced to 1000 Use synonyms
at the end
of the period.
Indian Linking Words
elepahant
rose drastically to about 10000 in 1997 later dropped and became steady in Correct your spelling
elephant
elephants
Malasia
Srilanka to 3000 in 1997
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Malaysia
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However
it showed a gradual decrease in Cambodia and Laos. Later increase to about 5300 in 1997 and continued to reduce steadily in Add a comma
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Myamma
, Thailand and China in 1997 reaching around 3000 in Correct your spelling
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Malasia
and Srilanka and hitting a low point in China in 1997.
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Malaysia
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of Vietnam Change the article
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The number
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elephant
in 2004 was about 1100 and Indian Fix the agreement mistake
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elephant
got increased to about 7300 in 2004.
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However
the number of Linking Words
Malasia
and Srilanka Correct your spelling
Malaysia
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elephant
became steady in 2004, later Fix the agreement mistake
elephants
Camdian
decrease to about 1200 and Laos Correct your spelling
Canadian
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elephant
to about 1100 Myanma Fix the agreement mistake
elephants
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elephant
to about 5300 in 2004 and decrease Fix the agreement mistake
elephants
steady
in Change the adjective
steadily
Thailanad
and chinaCorrect your spelling
Thailand
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