The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007.

The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007.
The
barchart
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bar chart
provides information about the changes in the highest number of Asian elephants in 1997 and 2004 between 1994-2007.
Overall
Asian
elephant
in 1999 and 2004 shows some fluctuations. Vietnam elephants show about 1200 in 1997 but later reduced to 1000
at the end
of the period. Indian
elepahant
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elephant
elephants
rose drastically to about 10000 in 1997 later dropped and became steady in
Malasia
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Malaysia
Srilanka to 3000 in 1997
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it showed a gradual decrease in Cambodia and Laos. Later increase to about 5300 in 1997 and continued to reduce steadily in
Myamma
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Mamma
, Thailand and China in 1997 reaching around 3000 in
Malasia
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Malaysia
and Srilanka and hitting a low point in China in 1997.
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The number
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of Vietnam
elephant
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elephants
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in 2004 was about 1100 and Indian
elephant
got increased to about 7300 in 2004.
However
the number of
Malasia
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Malaysia
and Srilanka
elephant
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elephants
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became steady in 2004, later
Camdian
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Canadian
decrease to about 1200 and Laos
elephant
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elephants
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to about 1100 Myanma
elephant
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elephants
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to about 5300 in 2004 and decrease
steady
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in
Thailanad
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Thailand
and china

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Population
  • Trend
  • Conservation
  • Endangered species
  • Ecosystem
  • Poaching
  • Sustainable
  • Wildlife
  • Habitat
  • Biodiversity
  • Endemic
  • Ecological balance
  • Fluctuate
  • Decline
  • Recovery
  • Preservation
  • Threats
  • Environmental impact
  • Human-wildlife conflict
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