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The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.

The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.
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The table interprets the data of varieties of
birds
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 species in Woodchuck region at different periods. There are some
birds
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, which are active not only during
summer
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, but
also
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winter
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 period,
such
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 as: Cardinals, Crows and Woodpeckers.
However
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, The prevailing fowls are found energetic only during one season, either
summer
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 or
winter
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. The only bird which caught merely in
winter
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 is Juncos; the only exotic
winter
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 bird in Woodchuck district. The remainders of the group,
such
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 as: Bluebirds, Mockingbirds; Orioles, and Vireos, need a dry and warm habitat.
Therefore
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, these fowls are merely found in
summer
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.
This
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 characteristic is not a special ability among the
birds
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 species in the aforementioned area.
To conclude
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, Every
birds
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 has its own favorable habitat condition. The prevailing of fowls are active during
summer
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 period.
However
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, the observation shows the opposing data for the one which is vibrant only in
winter
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, and the others can be found lively during both condition.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, such".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birds, summer, winter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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