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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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Linking Words
This
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These
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 two maps depict the planning for developing
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center
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the center
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 of the Islip
town
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 city in the future. The first map shows
status
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the status
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 of
this
Linking Words
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center
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centre
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 now and the
second
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 map shows the future developing
town
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. The major
changing
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change
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 is the
road
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. Now,
main
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the main
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road
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 passes through the
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center
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centre
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 of the
town
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 and
have
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has
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 two minor roads which can access
to
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apply
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the school and
park
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 that locate in the southwest and southeast, respectively. In the future, the main
road
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 will limit all vehicles and can enter by
pedestrian
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pedestrians
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 only.
New
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The new
A new
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road
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 will enclose the
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center
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centre
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 of the
town
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, can access
to
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apply
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both school and
park
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, and become a dual carriageway. Another
changing
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change
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 is
shopping
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a shopping
the shopping
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 area. The southern shop will not change but the
the
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apply
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northern shop will develop
to
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into
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 four functions: Bus station, Shopping
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center
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centre
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, Car
park
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 and new housing. All housing
are
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is
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 the same, but the
park
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 is going to be reduced the size.
Overall
Linking Words
,
new
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the new
a new
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 plan is designed to separate the zone distinctly by
create
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creating
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the
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a
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 new
road
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 around the
town
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, town, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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