It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

Young children must be taught to differentiate between right and wrong behaviour by punishing them if they misbehave. I disagree that children should be punished physically as
this
is detrimental to their personal development.
However
, there are gentle and effective methods that can be used to discourage children from bad behaviour. Corporal punishment is cruel and abusive to
children
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the children
and has severe consequences.
Firstly
, many children become isolated, depressed, anxious, and lack confidence due to terror. As a consequence,
this
can stop them from living their lives to the fullest and expressing themselves freely since they are afraid of misbehaving,
thus
, robbing children of many joys.
Secondly
,
this
method teaches them that misbehaving is only punished by striking and
this
can encourage them to be more aggressive as adults.
For instance
, they can start bullying their peers at school and there are high chances that they will be hostile parents who hit their children because
this
is what they have learned from their parents. There are multiple healthy methods to dissuade children from bad behaviour. Adults can inform children that they have misbehaved and stop speaking to them for a while until the child properly apologizes. Since children naturally want to please their parents and teachers, they will realize their mistake and try not to repeat it. Another method is banning children from playing outside or prohibiting them from using their favourite toys.
As a result
, children will start feeling helpless and will realize that their parents are the authority figures who must be respected.
For example
,
this
can be a beneficial method to teach stubborn children. In conclusion, not talking to children or forbidding them from doing things that they like are better methods to teach children morals than corporal punishment, which negatively impacts them.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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