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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or a shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the global era, where everyone wants to lead a luxurious
life
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 with all comforts of
life
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 and better
future
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 for their families
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 has to make compromises several times in their
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 I will discuss both the views and give my opinion. Nowadays
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where everyone wants to lead a successful
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and for that they have to
work
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 hard, but sometimes they will not get success in their
life
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 due to one or the other reason they get unsatisfactory job
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or a shortage of money but many folks accept
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 as their destiny and they decided to get with the same
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 in the
future
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Actually
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these kind of people are very less hopeful in their lives and
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 known as lethargic people who don"t want to
work
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 hard to improve their
situation
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. They are happy with their
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 and don"t want to improve them
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In the recent survey
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it has been observed in India, people who are not very hard worker will indulge them in antisocial crime
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, folks who never very hardworking accept the unsatisfactory job they always tries to change their
situation
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 for a better
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 because they are very optimistic regarding their
life
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 and want to achieve higher goals in their
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, they are
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 one who want to shape their
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 in a better way.They are very self determinant people and very oppressive
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For instance
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Dhirubai Ambani who used to
work
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 at
petrol pump
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the petrol pump
 changed his destiny with his hard
work
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 and determination and now his son Mukesh is the renowned personality and having no.
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Of
 petrol pumps. To conclude, if a person is fully determined to his goal
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 he will definitely achieve that aim and the person who is not an
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force or impel in an indicated direction
urge
 to change his destiny will remain the same.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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