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MORE AND MORE QUALIFIED PEOPLE ARE MOVING FROM POOR TO RICH COUNTRIES TO FILL VACCANICES IN SPECIALIST AREAS LIKE ENGINEERING, COMPUTING AND MEDCINE. SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT BY ENCOURAGING THE MOVEMENT OF SUCH PEOPLE, RICH COUNTRIES ARE STEELING FROM POOR COUNTRIES. OTHERS FEEL THAT THIS IS ONLY PART OF THE NATURAL MOVEMENT OF WORKERS AROUND THE WORLD.

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Now a
days
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day
, highly skilled people are travelling to
developed
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developing
 countries due to excessive
job
 opportunities offered by them. A group of people
are
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is
 of the opinion that the migration towards countries having
strong economy
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a strong economy
 leads to scarcity of skilled people in developing countries.
On the other hand
, people consider it as a part of routine work. In
this
 essay, I would be discussing both the views in detail. In
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 countries, it has become a growing trend to
move
 to a developed
country
, due to lack of
job
 opportunities.
This
 means, the
country
 gets deprived of its highly talented people.
Furthermore
, the expertise of the skilled individual
are utilized
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is utilized
 by the developed
country
.
For example
, a person having an excellent educational background and possessing skills related to a specific field, created a void in that field while migrating.
In addition
, tempting
job
 opportunities are offered by these
countries forcing
Accept comma addition
countries, forcing
 an individual to
move
 to a
country
.
On the other hand
, people migrate towards a better
country
 for a better living. As in developing countries, the state
does not provides
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does not provide
 any benefits and supports any individual, it is considered natural to
move
 to another
country
 for better opportunities.
For instance
, a graduated individual unable to get a good
job
 gets frustrated and works hard to
move
 to a
developed
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developing
country
 for a better living. In conclusion, people are migrating to developed countries for having a quality life. People seek for
good
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better
 opportunities offered by rich countries.
Under developed
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Underdeveloped
 countries should make
rules
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the rules
 and regulate movement of people to other countries, to avoid any scarcity of individuals affecting their own economy.

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