Government investment in the arts such as music and theatre is a waste of money . Government's must invest this money in public services instead. Discuss both the views and give opinion.

In
this
age and time
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authorities spend most of their funds on music as well as cinemas which is the wastage of
money
whereas other public amenities
also
important
besides
this
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I will spell out both the notions in the upcoming paragraphs
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Those people who say that
government
waste
money
on
art
sectors
such
as theatre because nowadays people do not have enough time and they utilize their plenty of time on their jobs
,
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schools and colleges as
a
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an
example
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That is
why
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they lose their interest due to the hectic schedule
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As a consequence
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they may not visit in
museams
a depository for collecting and displaying objects having scientific or historical or artistic value
museums
,
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,
art
gallery and cinemas and in
this
way
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,
if
government
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the government
give
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gives
more preference to construct
art
services
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
it would become
waste
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a waste
of legal funds. While others opine that
this
money
can be spent by authorities for education and medical organisations. To elaborate it
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,
these sectors play an indispensable role in everyone's life.
For instance
, when
government
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the government
will build education
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
and hospitals in every city and
village
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village, then
then
everyone might take
golden opportunity
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a golden opportunity
to get the facilities in their living area without going in other big cities. For
this
reason
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people not only would gain the
education but
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education, but
also
may live
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyles
by mean of medical necessities. To conclude, in my opinion
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,
although
art
services are the
first
priority of
government yet
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government, yet
instead
of
this
other necessary sectors are
also
playing an important role so
government
should invest
money
on these.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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