The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.
The pie chart illustrates figures (sayı) for
visitors
to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different
theme
parks in Britain in 1999.
It is clear that
theme
parks and museums/galleries were the
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most popular types of
attraction
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in that year. Blackpool Pleasure Beach received by far the highest proportion of
visitors
in the
theme
park
sector. Looking at the information
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detail, we can see that 38% of the surveyed
visitors
went to a
theme
park
, and 37% of them went to a museum or gallery.
By contrast
, historic
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houses
and monuments were visited by only 16% of the sample,
while
wildlife parks and zoos were the least popular of the four types of tourist
attarction
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attraction
attractions
, with only 9% of all
visitors
. In the
theme
park
sector, almost half of the people surveyed (47%) had been to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Alton Towers was the
second
most popular amusement
park
,
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with
17% of the sample, followed by Pleasureland in Southport with 16%.
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Finally
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Finally
Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor
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each welcomed 10% of the surveyed
visitors

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, theme, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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