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Some people believe that showing big sporting events like the Olympics and the World Cup encourages adults to exercise. Others think there are better ways to make people to exercise. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give relevant examples, write 250 words.

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Many
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
argument
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arguments
toward
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to
 whether to telecast international sporting event with help to promote youngsters to do physical activities.
However
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, some suggest that
their
in or at that place
there
 are other ways which will prove helpful to motivate kids. In following paragraphs, I will discuss both views and give my opinion. To start with how showing
olympics
the modern revival of the ancient games held once every 4 years in a selected country
Olympics
 and World Cup will help adults, primarily, sometimes, young people when watch something they get more influenced. Some of them set their role model and want to become like those sportsmen who they look at their televisions. So, they want to do
hardwork
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hard work
 like them and want to achieve their targets like their role models. On the other side of the coin, there are some other ways to make youngsters to do exercises
such
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 as authorities
sholud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 build more recreation centres which encourage people to go there.
Nextly
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, social welfare societies should
also
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 organize seminars to aware people about their health which they may cause due to lack of physical exercises. To add into
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,
school
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schools
the school
 should introduce physical education as a compulsory
subjects
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subject
 which includes lots of physical movements to get better health.
For example
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, if in
schools students
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schools, students
school students
school school students
 are forced to take part in games
then
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 they have not other opinions rather than take part in. In conclusion, in my opinion, showing international competitions is not that much effective as to encourage kids to do physical activity. But
combination
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the combination
a combination
 of both will help them to improve. As through internet or
television they
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television, they
 can get skills and by performing they get
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to implement
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this skills
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these skills
this skill
.
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