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write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staffs. how you feel about it what you heard about inconvenience from staffs what suggestion you can give

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to inform you about the inconvenience our staffs are facing due to lack of cafeteria service in our company premises. As we all know,our company is one of the leading companies in the field of marketing with elegant and fully co-operative and hardworking staffs. But they find it difficult at times to move on with their daily chores because of long working hours. It would be better for them to have
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an intermittent break where they can relax and have some snacks and chit chat with their colleagues. Even I feel the same as our job can be tiring after some time, it is necessary to have a relaxed mind. I would strongly recommend a snack bar and a cafeteria in our
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 recreational area which can
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 15 -20 people at a time.
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, we need eligible staff for canteen as well who are expert in coffee and tea making. Hope you will consider the situation and do the needful. Thanking you, Neil Nitin Mukesh.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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