children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brough up by wealthy parents. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, there have been an ongoing debate about mobile
phones
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phones'
phone's
role in the children's lives. While it is believed by some that those are detrimental to them, I strongly argue that those provide many noteworthy benefits. In
this
essay, I will discuss
major reasons
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the major reasons
for both the views and give my opinion. Examining the former group, the primary argument supporters would put forward is diverting children's focus on unimportant activities for them. Many children,
for instance
, would love to play games on their parents' or own phone, which leads to eyes' related problems at
early age
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an early age
or wasting their time rather than doing homework.
Furthermore
, there has been no restriction on access of the contents through these technical devices,
such
as pornography, violence clips, or purchase of drugs. Undoubtedly, these activities are way detrimental to any children
for
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in
their
mind growth and development
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growth and mind development
.
On the other hand
, despite the above arguments, numerous people think that cell phones are essential to widen their horizon and support in learning.
Firstly
, in
this
mordern
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
technological
life-style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, these keep little one up-to-date with new trends. A good example
for
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of
these are writing an
e-mail
(computer science) a system of world-wide electronic communication in which a computer user can compose a message at one terminal that can be regenerated at the recipient's terminal when the recipient logs in
email
, creating presentation or communication, which will be crucial for outstanding performance in their adult life.
Secondly
, there is a plethora of applications available in
market
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the market
, which could help children to learn by
own
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owner
. To illustrate, according to the leading newspaper, Tokyo Times, about 90% of the schools are using mobile devices for their
schools'
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school
assignments in the developed countries. To conclude,
although
a few people vary their opinion about how mobile phones are detrimental to children, I wholeheartedly think that these are essential to survive in
this
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
life due to above mentioned reasons.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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