Many young people regularly change their jobs over the years. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
of the youngsters switch their employment frequently. There are various reasons why
this
is happening and I believe that
this
has
have
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had
had both drawbacks and benefits. There are a number of causes of
this situations
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this situation
these situations
. The main one is job dissatisfaction because of low payment.
For instance
, if the organization is on
loss
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loss, then
then
it may not be able to pay handsome salary to
employee
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employees
the employee
.
As a
result they
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result, they
are compelled to change their jobs.
In
addition young
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addition, young
people probably do not get
promotion
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promoted
.
This
is because the high post in the organization where they are working would have been already occupied by the staffs who have low education.
Consequently
, the employee could be
demotivated
and change their jobs. I believe it has more disadvantages. One of the major one is loss of pension and health insurance because
this
benefits
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benefit
are given
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is given
has given
gives
to those who have worked in
same company
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the same company
for
longer period
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a longer period
longer periods
of time.
As a result
, in their old age they may suffer because of lack of money. Not only loss of pension, but
also
employer may not trust new employee since the experienced staff
always get
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always gets
more trust and support than those who are just hired. There they may be mentally stressed and probably not able to perform their job description well. In conclusion, it is clear that there are several reasons behind
this
trend and I believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

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