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labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computer are supposed to make our lives easier. However some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress?

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According to some,
device
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a device
 which
reduce
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reduces
 human work and advanced technology connected equipment's are adding complexity to human
life
. Whereas some, thinks that these devices
makes
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make
 our
life
 easier. Common people like housewife and international students are greatly benefited by using these technologies.
To begin
 with,
house hold
a social unit living together
household
 appliances
has been playing
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have been playing
 a vital role in sharing manual work and saves
time
. Especially, home makers are loaded with lots of activities, end up with physical and mental exhausted state which makes them difficult to balance their family
life
 and personal needs. But, when they are using modern equipment's
such
 as dishwasher, microwave oven, washing machine etc., they could save
time
 and energy and use their valuable
time
 for much needed
activities
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activity
such
 as spending quality
time
 with children's or personal grooming activities.
This
 in-turns
makes
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make
 them feel
relaxing
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relaxed
 and refreshing.
Recent study
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A recent study
Recent studies
 conducted by
health care department
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the health care department
 in India stated that less workload gradually reduces up-to 50% of the cortisol level production. Another important sector where technology
is consider
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is considered
 as a boon is in communication, helps to connect people from various countries regardless of boundaries. In olden days,
person
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the person
people
a person
 who
want
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wants
 to travel abroad are away from their family for different purpose
such
 as study or work, find it very difficult to communicate back and eventually fall on home sick. But, now-a-days with the help of advanced technology
such
 as mobile phone enabled with internet makes it possible to connect visually and for
cheaper price
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a cheaper price
cheaper prices
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
this
 makes their
life
 easier and stress free. In conclusion, even though advancement had some minor drawback, advance technologies paves the way to live a stress-free
life
 and save
time
 and energy.

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