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Should ordinary man be given the license to keep a revolver and gun?

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As these days, the crime is burgeoning at an alarming rate.
Therefore
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, it is argued that a common man must have permission to have weapons. I,
however
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, believe that
this
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 is not
appropriate idea
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an appropriate idea
the appropriate idea
 to tackle the situation.
This
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 essay will shed light on the arguments to support my view. To commence with, there are multifarious reasons which justify my opinion, one of them is that there will be unintentional killing of the people.
In other words
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, individuals with
such
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 ownership may take advantage of it and make use of revolver as opposed to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 intended purpose. It is commonly seen that in present scenario,
human being
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the human being
 has become short tempered and does not think before doing anything.
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,
instead
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 of having a healthy discussion on the matter of concern, the result in the death of
person
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a person
the person
 by pistol.
Moreover
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, if government bodies give legal authority to keep weapons,
then
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 it becomes a daunting task for them to make
difference
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a difference
the difference
 between a layman and criminals. To make it more precise,
this
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 authorisation will give
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to have guns without any fear and
thus
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, people become used to them.
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,
authorities
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the authorities
 are unable to rule over them and may
hampers
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hamper
 the peace of the nation. To wind up, taking
above factors
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the above factors
 into consideration, it is evident that allowing weapons to the ordinary man may not
proves
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prove
 fruitful.
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, in place of it,
government
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the government
 must make more responsible to mitigate the issue of crime.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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