Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.To What extent do you agree or disagree

These days, divas are popular for their

luxuries

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luxury

life style more than their accomplishments which makes teenagers aspire to follow a wrong path. While I admit that some of the

bigshots

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big shots

are famed for their charm and richness,

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however I

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however, I

disagree with the above argument, that all

such

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personalities are a bad influence for the youngsters, as there are some artists who are renowned for their hard

work

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and talent.

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essay will discuss On the

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hand, few bigwigs are famed for their look and richness which influence the younger generations in a negative way. They set a message that to achieve success one has to be wealthy and beautiful. There are some models who enact disgracefully on the media just to grab the attention.

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, Paris

Hilton who

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Hilton, who

is famed for her late night parties and posting the photos in the media of her designer costume. Young girls follow

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glamorous life style may impact negative path to youths. They only see the superficial side of fame and do not understand or appreciate the efforts that go into making one successful. On the

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hand, there are some personages who are popular for their achievements,

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leads the younger ones to positive way. They

work

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hard and have applied themselves to develop the skills and abilities to reach the goal from an early stage.

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effort, determination and ambition makes ones to achieve the success in their chosen field.

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, Jackie

Chan who

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Chan, who

is renowned for his martial art and in movies through his dedicated practice and effort.

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influence the children to achieve their dream by hard

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and their ability. In conclusion,

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there are some attractive and rich famed figures may be a bad role model for the upcoming

generations but

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generations, but

I believe there are personalities who are known for their achievement through their hard

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and dedication, will be

good role model

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a good role model

for future ones .