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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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Due to the fast growth of
number
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the number
 of people in the underprivileged countries, citizens are moving towards the artificial method of growing crops to raise the
production
 of foodstuffs.
This
 essay will discuss the mass
production
 of
grains which
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grains, which
 are obtained within a short period in
cost effective manner
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a cost effective manner
 through genetic methods as the biggest merit.
Secondly
,
this
 essay will discuss the deterioration of human health as the primary demerits
,
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,
due to intake of genetic foods On one hand, the main advantage of genetic method is to produce food grains in short span of time and to be
cost
 effective. As these are mostly pest resistant, loss of crops can be minimized,
thus
 there
is
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are
 higher yields.
Further
, it requires a small area to grow mass crops which
is
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are cost
cost
 effective. Genetically modified crops can be produced in varied climatic conditions.
For example
, nowadays, watermelon, muskmelon which
are
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is
 primarily summer fruits, are now available in all seasons.
On the other hand
, genetic crops puts human health at risk. On consuming biotech foods, the people may suffer from immune problems and they fall sick easily.
For example
, people are suffering from allergies and cancer by consuming these biotech foods.
Further
, some farmers are
ignorant probably
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probably ignorant
 about the modern farming techniques and may not able to follow the processes to ensure good crop
production
 and which will result in failure. To conclude, the benefits of using the genetic methods, provides higher
production
 of food grains in
shorter period
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a shorter period
 of time and in a
cost
 effective manner
.
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.
In contrast
, these may cause severe health effect and due to ineffective use of modern technics farmers may fall monetary loss .
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