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some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school #programmes
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Social experts and scientists are arguing whether should
community
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 services be a mandatory part of high school
curriculums
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curriculum
 or not.I reckon that it would be extremely beneficial to society for the reasons I will mention below.
To begin
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by allowing the youth to work for society, the government is protecting them from
culprits
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the culprits
 who might try to abet them in doing abominable actions in their free time.
In other words
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teens and young adults will use their free time in doing something beneficial for the
community
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instead
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 of wasting it
in
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with
 no avail.Having too much free time is one of the things that characterise teenage,
as a result
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, it is better be used in doing charity or helping the poor
,
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,
for instance
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.
In addition
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helping the poor and underprivileged ones will show teens how much they are lucky for being in a better place.
Consequently
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, they grow up with morals and attitude of helping the weak and the poor.An example of
this
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 case is a man in our
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 who owns a charitable organization for feeding ones who
can not
can not
cannot
 afford to.When asked for the reason for
esablishing
set up or found
establishing
this
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 organization, he said that he used to work in a similar organization in
Somailia
a republic in extreme eastern Africa on the Somali peninsula; subject to tribal warfare
Somalia
 and he loved what he was doing!
Moreover
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,
community
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 services will enhance the emotional and communication skills of high school students that they will need later in their practical life.Unfortunately, many are
upbrought
in a vertical position; not sloping
upright
 with deficient aptitudes and skills,
hence
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 they face serious difficulties afterwards.By forcing the teenagers to participate in their society, they will gain the experience needed to face the hardships of life. In conclusion, by amending high school syllabus so it requires students to participate in certain
community
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 tasks, namely improving neighbourhood, will benefit the students in their daily life and later in their jobs.
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, it will aid in raising a new generation that helps each other and show gratitude to their
community
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.
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