Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction Do you agree or disagree Provide relevant example if necessary

I do agree with the statement
.
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.
Money makes life
simple
Suggestion
simpler
in many aspects. People say if there is less
income but
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income, but
happiness is around
,
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,
then
life goes smooth. But my question to
such
kind of people is that there are many things which
can not
can not
cannot
be bought from low
salary
. The standard of life can’t not be updated from low
salary
.
For example
, if you want your children to get
high class higher education
Suggestion
a high class higher education
,
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,
if
any family
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any, family
member needs to be operated by a good doctor in a reputed hospital, everywhere money is needed.  Because, now a
days
Suggestion
day
, no field is untouched from expense. Expenses are so high even in small cities.These expenses give a sort of
stress
to man. If a person is not satisfied from
job but
Suggestion
a job, but
a job but
he is getting big
salary
, at least he can spend wherever he wants. Most importantly, he can join some swimming classes or he can go for meditation to relieve his
stress
.
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.
All I would like to conclude is that he can manage
stress
with higher
salary but
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salary, but
the
stress
from lower
salary
is difficult to manage.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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