The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie-charts illustrate the comparison of the money spent in seven different sectors by the native Americans, over a period of thirty years I.
e
. From 1966 onwards.
Overall
,
the
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food used to be the major
expense
of
the
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American citizens in 1966, but in 1999 it was replaced by
the
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cars. Four out of seven categories witnessed a fall in their expenditure, in
contrary
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a hike in money spent was noted in three things.
To begin
with, in 1966, a major chunk of the total income had to be spent by
the
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Americans in lieu of food I.
e
. 44%.
Whereas
, after thirty years,
this
expense
dropped to one-
third
of its value I.
e
. 14%.
On the other hand
, the cars which shared an
expense
of 23% in
year
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1966 had considerably increased to double the figures in 1996 I.
e
. 45%. The money spent on
the
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furniture and petrol dropped slightly from 9% and 10%, respectively, in 1966 to 8% each in 1999.
This
fall was,
however
,
was
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more conspicuous for the books which plunged to almost 1% in 1999 from 6% of the total
expense
, thirty years back.
In contrast
, the costs
on
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the
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restaurants and eatery doubled from 7% over
this
time frame and the computers which incurred a cost of 1% in 1966 had now hiked to 10% in 1999.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words e, expense with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • distribution
  • trends
  • significant
  • increases/decreases
  • categories
  • sectors
  • ranking
  • essential/discretionary spending
  • necessities/luxuries
  • economic
  • social factors
  • spending patterns
  • spending habits
  • notable changes
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • proportion
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