The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie-charts illustrate the comparison of the money spent in seven different sectors by the native Americans, over a period of thirty years I.
e
. From 1966 onwards.
Overall
, the
food used to be the major Correct article usage
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expense
of the
American citizens in 1966, but in 1999 it was replaced by Correct article usage
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the
cars. Four out of seven categories witnessed a fall in their expenditure, in Correct article usage
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contrary
a hike in money spent was noted in three things.
Add a comma
,contrary
To begin
with, in 1966, a major chunk of the total income had to be spent by the
Americans in lieu of food I.Correct article usage
apply
e
. 44%. Whereas
, after thirty years, this
expense
dropped to one-third
of its value I.e
. 14%.
On the other hand
, the cars which shared an expense
of 23% in year
1966 had considerably increased to double the figures in 1996 I.Change the article
the year
e
. 45%. The money spent on the
furniture and petrol dropped slightly from 9% and 10%, respectively, in 1966 to 8% each in 1999. Correct article usage
apply
This
fall was, however
, was
more conspicuous for the books which plunged to almost 1% in 1999 from 6% of the total Unnecessary verb
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expense
, thirty years back.
In contrast
, the costs on
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of
the
restaurants and eatery doubled from 7% over Correct article usage
apply
this
time frame and the computers which incurred a cost of 1% in 1966 had now hiked to 10% in 1999.Submitted by yasirjaved2219 on
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