Some people think having set retirement age of 65 years for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive pension at an earlier age.

When we look at the society we find different occupations for various
class
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classes
of people. Each person has a common set of
last
working
age
. I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that out of the large
poplution
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
populations
of the
world there
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world, there
are few
group
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groups
of people who think that it is not justifiable if one same
age
is
ste
put into a certain place or abstract location
set
sought
steep
as
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at
a retirement
age
. All
kind
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kinds
of jobs require different skills to
work
. In consideration to the same even the earnings are not similar.
Therefore
, in my
view individual
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view, individual
vocation should not have a similar
age
as set for their
last
age
to
work
.
Pension
Suggestion
A pension that is
that is
attained after completion of one's
emplyment
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
is one
kind
of a component in the salary. A
kind
of an employment where more amount of physical
strength not
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strength, not
only owe to get settled at an earlier
age
but
also
desrve
be worthy or deserving
deserve
to get their pension early.
This
will ultimately help them to rest early and take care of
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
.
Contary
Suggestion
Contrary
to the above another
kind
of job where more intellectual skill is used rather than
phyical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
skill, can have more strength to extend their working efforts at a certain higher
age
.
Therefore
, these
kind
of community can survive to
work
more than the other
age
group. According to me they do not suffer much in
phycial
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
health incase they
work
more.
Hence
, to recapitulate
acertaining
establish after a calculation, investigation, experiment, survey, or study
ascertaining
a
fix
Suggestion
fixed
retirement
age
has been
bery
used as an intensifier
very
arbitary
based on or subject to individual discretion or preference or sometimes impulse or caprice
arbitrary
to
few
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a few kinds
few kinds
kind
of groups. It shall be more helpful for
thoes
plural of that
those
these
this
community
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communities
who owe to get their pension at an early
age
. In my
view the
Accept comma addition
view, the
people of the society will be more satisfied in the event they have been given an opportunity to select their retirement
age
.

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