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Should the government or teachers be responsible for what is to be taught in schools? Give a reason for your answer from your knowledge or experience

#government #teachers #schools #reason
Imparting precise information has a drastic effect on candidates outcome. I think up to certain extent government has a significant role, but it makes the teachers outshine when it comes to what should be taught. Here we will have a glance at tutors role over government in the educational field. Teachers can produce precise talents from a bunch of students provided target information is imparted to the required. Nurturing a child with specific knowledge helps them to excel in a respective field, A child with a liking towards swimming if nurtured with a various techniques of his interest will fetch him an outstanding result,
likewise
 an individual with good communication skills can make his career as a news reader or a radio jockey.
Furthermore respective
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Furthermore, respective
 subject teachers ought to find out particular interest in students responding pattern and give them the opportunity to progress in their interest. While
government
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the government
 has designed a strict curriculum to which is to be followed by all affiliated schools they cannot find individual talent within
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the enormous crowd, however
the enormous crowd however
an enormous crowd however
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 can provide a platform and support teachers in achieving their goal. It can help the teachers organize a structure that best fits the students in developing their talent which will
further
 aid in getting better results. So I reckon that teachers with a benefit of direct access to the students’ progress, has an advantage in bringing out the hidden ability of a candidate and get the desired outcome. And that makes them solely answerable.
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